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As bright as a shining sun
As bright as a twinkling star
As cheerful as a hyper puppy
As cheerful as a little kid
That’s how you are
So… why aren’t you now?
You frown like it’s your job
Like it comes as easy as riding a bike
I miss you
Please come back
My shining sun
My twinkling star
My hyper puppy
My little kid
My everything
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Note to yourselves, I'm half-awake at the moment so... FYI if it sucks...
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I have so many mixed feelings about this. I feel kind of lighthearted at the beginning, but then it's like a storm breaks, and though it only lasts for a short time, it has a great impact.
I love how the end and the beginning are the same. And the last line is just perfect! It's that little tug of the laces that finishes the knot. So great!
Is this personal experience? Or is it just more of a rollplaying thing where you wrote it in someone else's point of view?
It doesn't suck! It's creative and flows very nicely. You're stories are amazing; poems are just typically more heartfelt. You are a terrific author, and basically everything you write is wonderful.
Great job, girl! Can't wait for more!